I like my house, because it’s where I live. My house is on the fourth floor of my villa. It has 3rooms, a restroom, a kitchen, and a living room. I don’t have my own room, but I have my own desk. I sleep with my mom and dad, while my brothers share a room together. I want a room of my own, or a bigger house, but I like here, because here is where I was born and where I lived for 11 years.

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Student’s Sentence : It has 3rooms, a restroom, a kitchen, and a living room.
Corrected Sentence : It has 3 rooms, a bathroom, a kitchen, and a living room.
Grammar Explanation : Add a space between number and noun; “bathroom” is more natural than “restroom” in this context.
Better Sentence : My house has 3 rooms, a bathroom, a kitchen, and a living room.

Student’s Sentence:  I want a room of my own, or a bigger house, but I like here, because here is where I was born and where I lived for 11 years.
Corrected Sentence : I want a room of my own or a bigger house, but I like it here because this is where I was born and where I have lived for 11 years.
Grammar Explanation: Remove unnecessary comma; “like here” → “like it here”; improve sentence flow and verb tense consistency.
Better Sentence : I want a room of my own or a bigger house, but I still like it here because this is where I was born and have lived for 11 years.

Better Paragraph:
I like my house because it is where I live. My house is on the fourth floor of my villa. My house has 3 rooms, a bathroom, a kitchen, and a living room. I don’t have my own room, but I have my own desk. I sleep with my mom and dad, while my brothers share a room together. I want a room of my own or a bigger house, but I still like it here because this is where I was born and have lived for 11 years.